This was great. But too short. Looks like Logan found his way back to Rory!
It's cute and sweet. I know you said that you've edited it to make logan's disapperance less confusing. a few rewordings would help.. but all in all, i think it's great.
I feel like the accident part makes it a bit unclear... Specifying the whole amnesia thing might make it a bit more clear either in the begining or at the end when Rory opens the door would make the story a bit better.
Even with this problem you are a very good writer!!
I'm going to join the - isn't Logan dead??? ship, good first story. but you got me all confused there.
Sorry! I realised after I had submitted it that I had missed out part of Finn's line. The car went into the harbour, but they never found the body! All a bit melodramatic I know - but the basic idea behind it is that he didn't actually die, his body was lost (amnesia or something of the like) and he has now returned to star's hollow to find Rory!
Sorry, hope that clears it up slightly - i will post either a new version or another chapter soon, to make it clearer!
I'm interested to see what happened and where you'll take this! I hope you get to update again soon! :]
You have me totally confused here, and by reading the other reviews, I'm not the only one.
Overall, decent writing. But your story is not complete. Who died then? And was it really Logan at the door? You're missing an ending.
Woah. I'm confused. Didn't he die?
I like the writing, but you totally lost me there.
i don't get it. Did Logan die or not? very confusing - but don't get me wrong the writing is great! Good first story!
I thought he died...........Don't quite understand
so he really did not die?
wait was it a dream?
isn't logan dead?
Sorry I have editted to hopefully make it slightly clearer - though the questioning was one of my objectives. See Finn's line - when he tells Rory of Logan's death!
Sorry and thanks for all the reviews - they have been really helpful!